
Hello and welcome to this month’s post for ‘Write Edit Publish’. The prompt for June, 2023 is Close Encounters of the Third Kind. I have chosen to interpret the prompt in my own way, keeping the spirit of the WEP intact, which says that you can take the cue in whichever direction you want to! The idea is to just have fun!! So, here we go …
CLOSE ENCOUNTER – THE MANY FACES OF TRUTH
( TW: Mental health, Abuse, Blood)

A deep-red blotch had settled on my kurta.* I was still holding the safety razor blade stolen from Amol’s kit in the morning. Stolen, because there was no other way of getting it. I’d been under house arrest for months.
Amol lay on the bed, his eyes heavy, his breathing languid. Blood gushed from his wrists, dripping on to the cotton bedsheet. His lips moved slowly. I think he called my name. ‘Sudha …’ Not the way he usually did, miffed, irritated. It was softer, almost limping out of his mouth.
Outside, I could see the grey winter clouds heavy with rain, settling on the mountain top. It’s the perfect day for tea and pakoras,* Amol had said. I had stealthily slipped a Restoril in his cup, one from the many subscriptions that had been piling up on the night stand. His favourite brand, Topaz Platinum, lay secure in the drawer.
Amol was trying to say something, but I could make no head or tail of it. In all these months, he had almost always failed to make sense of my words too. You’ve lost your mind, you’re hallucinating, ridiculous, you need to listen to the doctor – was all that he ever said.
I caught a glimpse of Amol’s wet eyelashes – long and dense, just the ones I had fallen in love with. I drew my face close to his, dabbing his eyes with the corner of my dupatta.* This encounter had been long due.
That’s when I heard the first splatter of rain, followed by a loud knock at the door…
***
We hadn’t come this close in months. Not since the neighbourhood had erupted with abrupt news of my brutality against Sudha. I wouldn’t have known had it not been for the suspicious glances, murmurs, and hushed silences that greeted me wherever I went. It was the local grocer’s help who muttered in my ear as he packed my day’s purchase. ‘Didi’s* been telling us all about your anger issues.’
I’d nearly dropped the bag of spices I was carrying. Sudha had been feeding me stories about the neighbourhood over the past few months of our married life. Had she been doing it the other way round too?
Sudha wiped my eyes with the end of her dupatta. Her face was a blur, a dim shadow of someone I had once known. I tried to speak but no words came out, only short, intermittent gasps escaped my mouth. Sapped of energy, I would have slipped into unconsciousness had it not been for the loud patter of raindrops. They kept me awake, reminding me of the tea and pakoras – perhaps, my only lapse in so many months.
That’s when there was that tap on the door…
(Total Words : 427 , FCA)
Kurta – shirt
Pakoras – potato/onion fritters
Dupatta – a long scarf
Didi – sister
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You’re on a roll Sonia. First your superb piece in Usawa and now this!
I’m on the edge of my chair! The tension, the perspective, the doubt you plant in your reader’s mind–Uff! Too good. In awe!
This is a brilliant story.
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Thank you, Arti. I am so happy that you took out the time to read.
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An excellent take on individual perceptions, Sonia. As I read your story, I thought of Rashomon.
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Ah yes, Lee! Thank you.
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So very creative! I enjoyed this take on the prompt. Love the tension here.
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Thank you!
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I am dangling over the cliff edge, itching to learn more.
I do love the two perspectives – and how different they are.
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Yes, the many faces of truth. Thank you 😊
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Hi Sonia – lots to this tale … with many sides to be explored. I certainly want to read more and to hear more of the story … Also the sentence: “It was softer, almost limping out of his mouth.” implied much … loved it – thank you … Hilary
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Thank you, Hilary. I will try to explore this further. So glad you enjoyed it.
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Such tension and mystery. The secrets behind closed doors, are stranger than fiction! Well done!
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Oh yes! That’s well put. Thank you.
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A dark story that makes me think of murder. And, who is at the door? Well written.
Nancy
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Thank you, Nancy!
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Sonia, great story. Overflowing with tension. Thanks for using the foreign (to me) words. I like learning something new. But who was at the door?
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Hi Denise. Thank you! I am glad you didn’t find the use of Hindi words distracting. This prompt has given me an idea of probably working more on this story.
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This is a very powerful piece. I enjoyed the two sides of the story perspective. Unlike some people, I like stories with ambiguous endings. Very well written!
~Ornery Owl~
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Thank you! So kind of you.
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A compelling piece of flash fiction! I love this line: “It was softer, almost limping out of his mouth.”
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Thank you, Liz! I like it too😊
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You’re welcome, Sonia. 🙂
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That’s some cliff hanger! Definitely want to know more…
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I’d like to take this further too😊
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So what is the truth? Did he or didn’t he abuse her? I’m inclined to believe the woman. Am I wrong?
Great yarn, Sonia.
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Thanks Olga. I’d like to believe her too.
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Powerful – where does the truth lie? It’s always told with a bias. Well done!
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Thank you, Jemi!
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You left your readers hanging, Sonia, the hallmark of a tale well wrought.
Fantastic.
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Thank you, Punam. I think I’d like to take this further too. Let me see what I can do with it.
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Wonderful! Look forward to it. You are welcome, Sonia.
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Hi,
Well-written and filled with tension, this story left me with wanting to know who was at the door, and what would happen next.
Excellent!
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Hi Pat. Thank you so much for reading. It was a quick one, I think I too would like to explore more.
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Wow, i wanted to read more.. beautifully expressed
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Thank you!
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